Favourite Artists: Okamoto Keito (Hey! Say! JUMP), Takeru Sato, Goo Jun Hoe (IKON) Favourite Dramas: Mischievous kiss Love in tokyo season 1 & 2, emergency couple
Biography: Reading and writing fanfiction has always been my passion. but because of school work, i took a two year hiatus to concentrate on my studies. now i'm back and hopefully i won't be taking anymore breaks anytime soon!
Trailer Maker's Profile: Here are some of my previous trailers.
1) The Bakumatsu
2) Fast Break (story by Ninner)
3) Never Ending Story (story by Ninner)
Credit: Badges are designed by Anna Clair, one of our graphic designers. Thanks Anna Clair!
OH MAI GAWD! best christmas present ever!!! ok, so maybe second best. ikon's album debut on christmas eve comes first kekeke ^^ thank you sooo much tali !! i was really really praying hard that you'd choose this particular request! muacks!
THAT BASTARD TAKA! HOW CAN HE NOT COME TO VISIT AFTER SO LONG?! your writing has really improved Ems, it really has evolved into something much much better. however if you want to improve further, here are some of my advice to you:
1) once again, dialogue has taken over your writing. i'm not saying that it's bad. actually dialogue can really help to make the story move. however, some dialogue is unnecessary. so you should cut down on unnecessary dialogues.
2) develop your characters more. if it was simply a one-shot, you could get away with 1-dimentional characters. but since this is a multi-chapter fic, it is important for readers to be able to connect with the characters. no matter how good the plot, if the readers can't identify with the characters, it takes away the "oomph factor" making the story less exciting. by giving them little quirks, or things like Emmalee's backstory (e.g why she ended up so depressed) or why taka started his own self-harm is essential in showing your readers the other facets of their personality. and keep in mind not just to only focus on the main characters, but also on the supporting characters in your fic. like talia and toru, what is their relationship with the main characters? what made them that way? etc etc
Anyways please don't get disappointed and disheartened by what i mentioned. like i've mentioned, this is is a very good attempt and your writing has improved by leaps and bounds.
i know that judging by all my existing fics i'm not a good writer, but those points that i've mentioned are what i learnt when i was on haitus. and i sincerely want you to learn them too so that you can soar to greater heights. anyways i am very impressed with the fact that you've completed this fic HAHA! my track record isn't good with muti-chapters, i always end up abandoning them HAHAHA.
taka begginf for sex, now thats funny HAHAHA! from the way you portrayed him, i'd expected a long queue of girls waiting in line to fuck him, not the other way round! but seriously, it's heartbreaking to read all these suicidal tendencies and self hurt. it's absolutely terrifying to sink into such deep depression. anyways good job on this chapter!