Anyway, in respond to your reply for chapter 10. I don't really mind you starting smack into the drama cos I sometimes do that when I don't want to talk so much as well.
I think the story line is happening too quickly, and it would be good if you can describe an individual feelings on the situation.
Keep the people in character. In chapter 14, canon XiaTian would never attack straight away (remember, he's suppose to be naive, so of course he would probably be the first one to believe XiaYu).
Don't worry; I kind of get what you're heading straight at.
Hm, so you graduated from secondary school? how old are you now? I'm fifteen this year anyway.
What country are you from? perheps we could exchange msn emails so we could discuss about our ideas?
Author's Response: Yes. I graduated from Secondary school long ago. I'm 22 this year and am a Singaporean. Where are you from? My msn is firstname.lastname@example.org