Jannie this was so exciting ! It left me totally pumped to see more! I want to know what kind of jewel heist this is and how they're going to pull it off and kyaaah why these two gangs work with each other! (And a 50/50 split is rough! :O but I guess Toma's giving in for other reasons lololol XD)
Selina reminded me of a very hardheaded gangster so I thought you characterized her quite well. I love how she brought the knife out!
Jun was really good too but there's a lot about him that seemed hidden away so that added to the mystery of his actions and words even though he was the point of view the chapter focused on for quite a while
Toma and Lilli were both charismatic, loyalty-inspiring leaders so I can see why the other two are loyal to them. That sort of light-heartedness that's easy to succumb too :)
If you do end up writing more! I'd love to read it!
Author's Response: Thank you for review as always! You totally get me and understand the nuances. This one-shot was totally inspired by a dream I had recently when both Jun and Toma are in there. Exactly like the story, they were both gangsters with slick back haired Jun and blond Toma! Totally hot! I love the chemistry between Lillith and Toma. It's very unique that I might explore further.
But good news, THE MUSE IS NOT DEAD!
Thank you for inspiring me to write. The other original fic has been started which I'll probably pick up next weekend. woot!